Writing Goals/ Vocabulary

Goals

1.) Using Syntactic Devices to score higher in idea development and content

2.) Improving my conclusions in essays by using a reflection technique

3.) Posting at least one poetry piece on my blog each month, wither to be graded , or just for fun

4.) Making sure that my next writing piece is error free and is proof read by more than one person.


Vocab

-Ornate- Elaborate, kind of complicated
-Deft- skillful, handy or clever. deft hands; a deft mechanic.
-Addle- to confuse
-Contrive- to affect, plot, or imitate
-Ease- free of pain
-Aghast- horrified, dumbfounded
Dictionary



The Bean Trees - Barbara Kingsolver

\\Author's Note: 
SACRED -adjective- Devoted or dedicated to a deity or religious purpose
PROFANE  -adjective- Characterized by irrelevance; irreligious
This book response is devoted to the prompt "Describe how the events and specifically the description of the park and activities that take place there could be seen in a relationship to the theme.  Can we tell the difference between sacred and profane?"


Dog Doo Park, in your mind you see a dog park filled with dogs scattering every which way. Or maybe a park filled with young children screaming and teenagers sitting in corners plotting evil things. What you actually see is winter.  Dead, dried out vines creeping along the ground.  They ruin the park.  They make it ugly and useless.  And yet, people still have hope.  You wait for spring to arrive and then you visit the same place, but it is now filled with happy people and beautiful colors and plants.  Everywhere you look the vines have bloomed into flowers and the grass is long and thick.  That is why people wanted to live here, because of the beauty.

The park was once called by its actual name, Roosevelt Park.  After Elenor, not Franklin.  It was relaxing, and possibly even breath taking.  Beauty, especially in nature, is sacred.  We need that beauty to remember why we are here.  Without people to steady the park's growth, the park would fall to pieces.  We can look at this in our own lives, but twist it a bit.  The park could represent anything that is beautiful to you.  Some example's would be a newborn child, a cool place to sit on a summer day, or maybe even a warm brownie straight from the over.  Without a caring parent, the newborn could not grow.  Without sweaty joggers, the spot in the shade would be forgotten, or unnoticed.  Without a skilled baker, the brownie would burn.  We like to take these things out of our mind and focus on the beauty.  But they are still there, waiting to happen if no one's  standing by to help.

This brings me to a new theme that can be found in the story.  We wouldn't be where we are now without the help of others.  To put it simply,we wouldn't prosper.  We would simply wilt away and die, like a vine in winter time, sitting alone cold and ignored.  The vine wasn't the miracle of Dog Doo Park, the people were.  The people who visit the old in the nursing homes.  The people who cheer on their favorite team, no matter how bad they are. The people who continue to watch the vine and it's beauty.  Because to them, its beauty is sacred.


February 1, 2011

Author's Note: Today I am continuing my thought on the theme of the novel, The Bean Trees.  I think the theme is where we would or wouldn't be without the help of others.  I was inspired to write about what I read in chapter ten about Edna being blind.  Please look for my voice and use of Climatic Patterns.

We need each other.  We wake up to a family and spend the morning in their company.  Then, we come to school, driven by a friendly bus driver or sort of chauffeur.  When we arrive at school we are greeted by friends, helped by teachers, served by cafeteria staff, and driven home by someone who cares about getting us there safely.   Going through this day alone is possible, but would be difficult, slow, and awfully lonely.

If others presence is necessary in your day, imagine the life of someone handicapped in some way.  The elderly cannot work quick and precise, and they need youth to do difficult tasks for them.  Those who are deaf cannot understand others, and they need people skilled in sign language to help them learn.  I can honestly say that I was not thinking about any of this while reading.  Not until I reached the part about Edna, who is blind.

People who are visually impaired, or cannot see are considered blind.  They rely on others to guide them.  A close friend, family member, aid, or guide dog will help them to do simple tasks that they cannot do on their own. Walking across a busy street or down a flight of stairs without sight could be dangerous or result in serious injuries for a person who cannot see.  When Taylor saw how Edna Poppy always wore the same colored clothes, she found it strange, but when she noticed that Virgie Parsons always had a tight grip on her elbow it lead to one conclusion; Edna was blind.

This detail really interested me because it is one of many examples that I have found in the story that demonstrates my idea for a theme.  When you see simple types of things, like guiding a blind person, being done, it teaches you a lesson that you aren't even aware of learning. People helping out and relying on others is shown outside of The Bean Trees as well, which in my opinion makes it worth writing about.

February 3, 2011

Author's Note:  The prompt today was to write about how they eat in heaven and how this relates thematically to the novel. I know it's short but I didn't feel like there was much information given about this part of the story.  I am continuing my theme of our need for others.  Please tell me if I have any unnecessary information that I could take out of my response.

As Taylor, Turtle, Lou Ann, Dwayne Ray, Virgie, Edna, Esperanza, and Estevan are sitting at the dinner table, Estevan tells the a South American story about Heaven and Hell.  It was about how people in hell must sit in a room filled with the best food. The people in hell could not eat and it drove them to madness.  The people in heaven were always well fed and happy.  When I read this story,  instead of paying attention to people from heaven while they were eating, I tried to think about why the people from hell were were suffering.

After thinking about it for a while and looking for clues in the text, I came to the conclusion that the people from hell really suffered because of their own asininity.  They scream in pain to each other, none of them bothering to help another.  They have mop length spoons for themselves alone.  My point may be hard to understand so let me compare them to the people in heaven.  They sit around  a table just like the one in hell and they eat the soup, smiling and laughing with each other.  Although the soup is described as delicious, Estevan still asks at the end of the story why everyone thinks that these people are so happy.  You could say because they are never hungry, or you could say that it is because they are all in each others company.  That is how they eat in heaven, not only do they have good food that they can eat, but they have a good community to share it with.  

February 15, 2011  Stream of Consciousness Poem 

Author's Note:  This was a stream of consciousness until I turned it into a poem.  It takes place in a library when Turtle and Taylor were on their way home.  Please criticize me on any extra words or phrases I could remove.
 
Building of wonders.
 Books in never ending aisles

Intense stares  at  encyclopedias
Without  destination
Slam!
Your hand flies down
"Shhhh!" someone whispers

Silence is necessary,
A calm aura
Rests your mind
Allows focus
Develops  feelings  when you walk inside
Overpowers  your senses  
Your nose-
 smells unopened books
Your fingers-
Wait
Urging you to turn crisp delicate pages
Your mouth-
 doesn't open once

Everything you ever need
 and more
 lay ahead
You  didn't come searching
As it always will,
 it found you.  

You  pull yourself away,
You must
This piece of information
This tiny detail
 will forever stay with you.  


11 comments:

  1. I really like how you tied this entire piece together. The beginning starts at one point, then the body takes us through your interpretation of the text, and then you bring us to your own, insightful conclusion, adding a new, possible theme. That is really excellent.
    I like the way you used sentence structure to craft your points, constructing parallel sentences stylistically. I think the transition to the last paragraph was a little low level in comparison to the rest of the text, and you could probably use the A/B method, or something more subtle that the one you decided to use.

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  2. Wow. I love reading your writing. I love how you are so descriptive and use good vocabulary. I like how at the beginning you put the definitions for sacred and profane. When you write, I can really see a picture in my head. I like how you described the park in calming, beautiful way. I like how mentioned sacred, profane, and themes. Great job!

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  3. That was a very good response I liked the way you looked at and connected it to real life. I think it was cool how you went beyond, "oh it's a pretty vine, it's a miracle!" and said that the real Miracle of Dog Doo Park was the people who made the park sacred.

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  4. That was a very good response. The way you went into detail, and put tons of real life examples in the piece was really good. I love how you thought deeper to the miracle, thought deeper of the vine. I love how your paragraphs were not perfected to be the same length, because it just bugs me when people do that. You had a very good introduction, it was different than any I've read before, and the conclusion was also great.

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  5. Comment for February 1, 2011 Response

    Again, I love reading your writing. You had great vocabulary and balance throughout your piece. I can completely see your voice throughout this response. But can you explain a Climatic Pattern? I especially loved your introductory paragraph. Your writing is so calm and relaxed and when I read it. Great job!

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  6. I liked the things you pointed out in the story and how you related them to school and real life. The thought of Edna being blind never crossed my mind until Taylor found out about it. I was surprised that she was and I liked the way you responded to the scene. In all I think it was a good response.

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  7. Comment to chapter 10 response

    I could tell very much that you thought extremely deeply, all of your thoughts being recognized. It seemed short, but that was just because of the way it flowed, and there were no errors. Every saying in your piece was meant to be there, and there were not any unnecessary sentences. This was a very nice piece. Your voice and opinion were brought out very nicely. Good job.

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  8. Response to poem of Feb 14:
    First off, wow! Lovely poem. This is so beautiful, so crafted. You really have a sense of how to strip away those unnecessary words, to distill the essence of meaning, making the remaining language all the more powerful. At the same time, there is enough left to give the reader a real concrete picture. As a bonus, I loved the use of aura; with tricky words, it's hard not to have them stand out, or appear forced into use. Here is feels so natural. Well done.

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  9. I loved that. I really like the repetition in the third "block" of your poem. I thought that you were very descriptive and your vocabulary is great. I like how you put quotes into your poem. Your author's note is helpful to set the scene and give a little bit of insight to your poem. Amazing job!

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  10. I really liked your poem in general. I know you said to look for extra words but I didn't see any, good job!

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  11. This was a very nice poem. I love how you talked about the feelings and scent. You did a good job connecting all of your lines, but breaking them apart to be short and individualized. Great Job. I really liked this.

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